1thatseeks
05-31-2009, 09:22 AM
I read a lot of buttyboy's stories lately and it has encouraged me to write my own again... but before i do i would like to know what others feel about my style of writing. so i will show you a section of own my older writings... its kind of wordy and doesn't get to the point(sex) right away. i tried to be as descriptive as possible, but i hope its just as enjoyable...
hopefully if you like this one, i will write one involving arabs, turks, perisians etc... that are much shorter than this...lol (wasn't sure how long it would be in the forum)
I was a bit younger when i wrote this so be nice...jk!!
this is chapter 1
It was my 3rd year of my high schooling in Japan. On a studious solemn night, I decided to take a break form my coursework in order to hang out with my friends and my girl friend. We ventured out onto the infamous Shibuya district with its ambient glow and chaotic demeanor. Aimlessly, with reasoning, we selected a meek establishment in a narrow path between the newer buildings of Shibuya. After a few hours of clubbing, dancing and parting, one by one my friends fled from my side. I, faithful to my dear stayed at the bar accompanying her there. I reflexively savored the bitter sweet favors of varies beverages with a hint of methanol. I gradually descended into a placid form of myself, and as I did, she conveyed, I never listen to her and I never waited on her hand on foot. I figure she was lying and wanted to use that as an excuse to go mess with other men. My current state left me ignorant to her comments. Frustrated, she suddenly left my side and voices she’s going to dance. I thought to my self, with whom… why not her love one. Well, see didn’t put forth no attempt to dance with me. At that time, I was dazed in humble drunkenness. I found my self alone with strangers at my side… minding their business. I witnessed her betrayal of my trust and our selfless time by submitting her self to the will of the average blue collar fellow. Tempting there palette with her seductive actions, motions, gestures. Such an event angered me and woke me up from my drunken but meek mindset. Heart broken, I stumble to the back door of the bar…. And I find myself setting outside on back steps angered and sad… I knew it was only a matter time before she would stumble to some mellow man so he can have his way with her.
It was in the twilight… the expansive urban megalopolis of Central Tokyo hummed with excitement; the glowing of the euphoria of this spectacular mega city was truly mesmerizing. The glitter of nearby Neon lights appeared just beyond the fringe of dark haze that blanked my vicinity. Sulking in my sorrows, I hunched over in the dead of the twilight… slowly freezing…. My state of mind gave little care towards my body’s numbness. The bliss of Tokyo city night dawned on me, and for quite sometime I felt peaceful. Instantaneously, a rather large hand grasped and warmed my sinewy shoulder. A sudden electric current shot through my spin. In my influenced state, my meekness dampened the motion on legs to the point of an inch. I turned around a fast as my body would allow. The gigantic dark figure rested beside me as If it were sent here for comfort. I quivered in the wake of the figures’ omniscience. In a horse beastly vocal announced, “Are you ok, you seem down?” That hand ,now encompassed the whole of shoulder, only hence the nature of his size. Startled, I froze in place as if I came in contact with nitro glycerin. In a course tonnage I retort,” I’m fine… who the hell are you.” I’m Rokuno, I live around here, I saw you in the bar earlier and I wanted to say hello. I don’t normally saying anything to foreigner but there’s something different about you.” “I’m sorry I don’t normally talk to strangers”, I implied. I became quickly defensive, but his demeanor responded in such ways I couldn’t fathom. With in a few moments, I became at ease around this individual.… “How old are you”. “ えと ㈠...㈡㈩㈢.”… “No, you don’t look like that is your age”… What age do you think I am? “17”. I shrugged a bit at his accuracy. “ I saw your female friend, she’s quite lovely”… “Yeah I know, but she is no longer mine. That bitch dumped me. I saw her writing letters to some bastard, saying that she wants to fuck him and have his kids. I really did love her and she just….” In the middle of my belligerent monologue he told me that the same thing happened to him. “You’re a foreigner, right?” he implied in a sensually husky voice. I thought to myself, “Clearly dumb ass… of course I’m a foreigner.” Then he disembarked from the metallic steps and arising to alley level. “I know this great place that has the best sake, do you want to come with me” At first I told him, “I don’t know…” “They are foreigner friendly” even though he was a stranger to me I felt comfort from his voice and aura. The dark alley continued to conceal his identity from my sensory, which was accompanied by continuity of elusion of his face. I got up to follow him. His physique eclipsed the street lights as we approached the hellish ambiance of Shibuya. As we did, all manner of thought hastily raced throughout. I questioned my serenity silently; who is this and why is this being doing such things? I sped up to catch a glimpse of the protruding face of this person. He was only about a few inches taller than me but was three fold my girth in stature. As we drew closer to the street’s radiant light, I saw his face appear and began to be uncovered by the invading lights of Shibuya city. No longer this mysterious creature could hide he’s person form me. His beard which was finely trimmed was unveiled to my sights for the first time. Slowly I saw his tanned yellow skin and facial features emerge form the darkness of the alley. My vision projected a face lined and edged with a thin but definite straight beard (It seemed as if someone with great precision, meticulously placed every strand of hair correctly in place), a protruding arced medium noise, a crux chin clothed in a blanket of spiked short hair, and somewhat well defined cheekbones. Even though only a portion of his face was visible, it engaged my fancy to manifest thoughts of things of taboo manner. As I engaged into deeper thought, the only word I could fathom was Uncle. My mind would not jump shift and leave such taboo related venue. My roaming eyes searched for any physical features in which I could “feed upon”. My eyes were deemed useless in the insufficient light.
Finally, the neon lights of the vibrant metropolis warmed our faces, slowly defeating the infinite void of the alley. The city’s lights were accompanied by the sounds and sweet smells of urban life. The vivacious street lights revealed more of his person to me. To my delight, his physique perturbed that of a retied body builder in cased in a hefty packaging of chubbiness. Sporting a large upper body and medium lower body, my eyes were tantalized. I was clueless to his physique other than the obvious due to his black personally tailored three piece suit. The tight turns and twists of his suit pants were created and destroyed by the motion of his struts. This became evident when I stared at his tailored suit. These distortions made reference of the beautiful bulge that obtruded forward from the vacancy between those powerful legs. His casually, walking, generated harmonic swinging of the prominence, which was in contrast to his….” NO… I can’t think of stuff like this”, I thought. Once reality deemed to my conscious mind, my moralities forced me to feel ashamed and remorseful for my sinful lusting.
Our excursion was quite long. We ventured through the pandemonium of the street life. I followed this stranger to another part of the megalopolis, in which I have never set foot in. I generally befell in to a worried manner. Not knowing where we were going I blindly followed. The excursion ended at tavern like establishment. Located in a quiet district, mostly likely outside of Shibuya, gave it a humble abode ambiance. I found my self gawking at his physical facial features. Even though I my mind never fancied such things from my preset sexual preferences, I continued as if my preference were altered. My heart, which once belonged to my sincere woman (GF), now was owned by this strange man. I couldn’t believe it… my mind went in a chaotic state. I was forced to patronize my very deep rooted morals and beliefs. Stricken with this familiar emotion, I closed the gap between us as we walked… His gorgeous light brown eyes, like the lighthouse at the sea’s frontier, focused on me. The muscles in his mainly face flexed to reveal an upward motion on the portion of his lips that were closest to me. A grin with epic proportions perpetuate, if you will… I found myself hypnotized by his erotic facade. My conscious mind reclaimed my baffled body. As soon as such a thing happened he maliciously groaned, “Ok… here it is” such a voice created an internal battle, between my familiar, but awkwardly new emotions, and my religious based mindset. As a side effect of this battle my mind was left defenseless. A few moments later, I was led to a back room… the atmosphere of the room was sensual and mono simplistic. The place had a distinct décor of ancient Japanese styling and aura with atmosphere of relaxation and comfort to the soul. We sat at this curbed like chairs lined with silk like frothiness. I finally had the pleasure of viewing his whole being in the low lighting in the room. The room was filled with mostly men of double my stature and women of half theirs. A waitress of came to us, and brought us a bottle of saki and little cups to drink from. I found it strange that she would randomly bring us a bottle, I presume Rokuno comes here often and orders the same thing. He offered me some and I didn’t refuse. Tasting the wine was new to me. I had beer before but not something like this…it had a strong taste yet with every sip I found it oddly relaxing. With that, we both became buzzed after 12 for him and 5 for me. He began to speak Japanese to me in somber mood. I understood nearly everything, but his accent made it hard sometimes to pick up the finer details. He spoke something near this, “ぼくは㈣㈩㈡そして .” He stated this in deep masculine indigenous accent. Once more, we were being seduced by the influential alcohol and began to conversed and contemplate.
The ever vigilant war that raged in my mind… slowly my emotions over taken me and I gazed upon his tanned face. My mind now manifested many fancies from his medium lips, scuffle-like beard protruding from a nearly fine cut face, delightful pretty
hopefully if you like this one, i will write one involving arabs, turks, perisians etc... that are much shorter than this...lol (wasn't sure how long it would be in the forum)
I was a bit younger when i wrote this so be nice...jk!!
this is chapter 1
It was my 3rd year of my high schooling in Japan. On a studious solemn night, I decided to take a break form my coursework in order to hang out with my friends and my girl friend. We ventured out onto the infamous Shibuya district with its ambient glow and chaotic demeanor. Aimlessly, with reasoning, we selected a meek establishment in a narrow path between the newer buildings of Shibuya. After a few hours of clubbing, dancing and parting, one by one my friends fled from my side. I, faithful to my dear stayed at the bar accompanying her there. I reflexively savored the bitter sweet favors of varies beverages with a hint of methanol. I gradually descended into a placid form of myself, and as I did, she conveyed, I never listen to her and I never waited on her hand on foot. I figure she was lying and wanted to use that as an excuse to go mess with other men. My current state left me ignorant to her comments. Frustrated, she suddenly left my side and voices she’s going to dance. I thought to my self, with whom… why not her love one. Well, see didn’t put forth no attempt to dance with me. At that time, I was dazed in humble drunkenness. I found my self alone with strangers at my side… minding their business. I witnessed her betrayal of my trust and our selfless time by submitting her self to the will of the average blue collar fellow. Tempting there palette with her seductive actions, motions, gestures. Such an event angered me and woke me up from my drunken but meek mindset. Heart broken, I stumble to the back door of the bar…. And I find myself setting outside on back steps angered and sad… I knew it was only a matter time before she would stumble to some mellow man so he can have his way with her.
It was in the twilight… the expansive urban megalopolis of Central Tokyo hummed with excitement; the glowing of the euphoria of this spectacular mega city was truly mesmerizing. The glitter of nearby Neon lights appeared just beyond the fringe of dark haze that blanked my vicinity. Sulking in my sorrows, I hunched over in the dead of the twilight… slowly freezing…. My state of mind gave little care towards my body’s numbness. The bliss of Tokyo city night dawned on me, and for quite sometime I felt peaceful. Instantaneously, a rather large hand grasped and warmed my sinewy shoulder. A sudden electric current shot through my spin. In my influenced state, my meekness dampened the motion on legs to the point of an inch. I turned around a fast as my body would allow. The gigantic dark figure rested beside me as If it were sent here for comfort. I quivered in the wake of the figures’ omniscience. In a horse beastly vocal announced, “Are you ok, you seem down?” That hand ,now encompassed the whole of shoulder, only hence the nature of his size. Startled, I froze in place as if I came in contact with nitro glycerin. In a course tonnage I retort,” I’m fine… who the hell are you.” I’m Rokuno, I live around here, I saw you in the bar earlier and I wanted to say hello. I don’t normally saying anything to foreigner but there’s something different about you.” “I’m sorry I don’t normally talk to strangers”, I implied. I became quickly defensive, but his demeanor responded in such ways I couldn’t fathom. With in a few moments, I became at ease around this individual.… “How old are you”. “ えと ㈠...㈡㈩㈢.”… “No, you don’t look like that is your age”… What age do you think I am? “17”. I shrugged a bit at his accuracy. “ I saw your female friend, she’s quite lovely”… “Yeah I know, but she is no longer mine. That bitch dumped me. I saw her writing letters to some bastard, saying that she wants to fuck him and have his kids. I really did love her and she just….” In the middle of my belligerent monologue he told me that the same thing happened to him. “You’re a foreigner, right?” he implied in a sensually husky voice. I thought to myself, “Clearly dumb ass… of course I’m a foreigner.” Then he disembarked from the metallic steps and arising to alley level. “I know this great place that has the best sake, do you want to come with me” At first I told him, “I don’t know…” “They are foreigner friendly” even though he was a stranger to me I felt comfort from his voice and aura. The dark alley continued to conceal his identity from my sensory, which was accompanied by continuity of elusion of his face. I got up to follow him. His physique eclipsed the street lights as we approached the hellish ambiance of Shibuya. As we did, all manner of thought hastily raced throughout. I questioned my serenity silently; who is this and why is this being doing such things? I sped up to catch a glimpse of the protruding face of this person. He was only about a few inches taller than me but was three fold my girth in stature. As we drew closer to the street’s radiant light, I saw his face appear and began to be uncovered by the invading lights of Shibuya city. No longer this mysterious creature could hide he’s person form me. His beard which was finely trimmed was unveiled to my sights for the first time. Slowly I saw his tanned yellow skin and facial features emerge form the darkness of the alley. My vision projected a face lined and edged with a thin but definite straight beard (It seemed as if someone with great precision, meticulously placed every strand of hair correctly in place), a protruding arced medium noise, a crux chin clothed in a blanket of spiked short hair, and somewhat well defined cheekbones. Even though only a portion of his face was visible, it engaged my fancy to manifest thoughts of things of taboo manner. As I engaged into deeper thought, the only word I could fathom was Uncle. My mind would not jump shift and leave such taboo related venue. My roaming eyes searched for any physical features in which I could “feed upon”. My eyes were deemed useless in the insufficient light.
Finally, the neon lights of the vibrant metropolis warmed our faces, slowly defeating the infinite void of the alley. The city’s lights were accompanied by the sounds and sweet smells of urban life. The vivacious street lights revealed more of his person to me. To my delight, his physique perturbed that of a retied body builder in cased in a hefty packaging of chubbiness. Sporting a large upper body and medium lower body, my eyes were tantalized. I was clueless to his physique other than the obvious due to his black personally tailored three piece suit. The tight turns and twists of his suit pants were created and destroyed by the motion of his struts. This became evident when I stared at his tailored suit. These distortions made reference of the beautiful bulge that obtruded forward from the vacancy between those powerful legs. His casually, walking, generated harmonic swinging of the prominence, which was in contrast to his….” NO… I can’t think of stuff like this”, I thought. Once reality deemed to my conscious mind, my moralities forced me to feel ashamed and remorseful for my sinful lusting.
Our excursion was quite long. We ventured through the pandemonium of the street life. I followed this stranger to another part of the megalopolis, in which I have never set foot in. I generally befell in to a worried manner. Not knowing where we were going I blindly followed. The excursion ended at tavern like establishment. Located in a quiet district, mostly likely outside of Shibuya, gave it a humble abode ambiance. I found my self gawking at his physical facial features. Even though I my mind never fancied such things from my preset sexual preferences, I continued as if my preference were altered. My heart, which once belonged to my sincere woman (GF), now was owned by this strange man. I couldn’t believe it… my mind went in a chaotic state. I was forced to patronize my very deep rooted morals and beliefs. Stricken with this familiar emotion, I closed the gap between us as we walked… His gorgeous light brown eyes, like the lighthouse at the sea’s frontier, focused on me. The muscles in his mainly face flexed to reveal an upward motion on the portion of his lips that were closest to me. A grin with epic proportions perpetuate, if you will… I found myself hypnotized by his erotic facade. My conscious mind reclaimed my baffled body. As soon as such a thing happened he maliciously groaned, “Ok… here it is” such a voice created an internal battle, between my familiar, but awkwardly new emotions, and my religious based mindset. As a side effect of this battle my mind was left defenseless. A few moments later, I was led to a back room… the atmosphere of the room was sensual and mono simplistic. The place had a distinct décor of ancient Japanese styling and aura with atmosphere of relaxation and comfort to the soul. We sat at this curbed like chairs lined with silk like frothiness. I finally had the pleasure of viewing his whole being in the low lighting in the room. The room was filled with mostly men of double my stature and women of half theirs. A waitress of came to us, and brought us a bottle of saki and little cups to drink from. I found it strange that she would randomly bring us a bottle, I presume Rokuno comes here often and orders the same thing. He offered me some and I didn’t refuse. Tasting the wine was new to me. I had beer before but not something like this…it had a strong taste yet with every sip I found it oddly relaxing. With that, we both became buzzed after 12 for him and 5 for me. He began to speak Japanese to me in somber mood. I understood nearly everything, but his accent made it hard sometimes to pick up the finer details. He spoke something near this, “ぼくは㈣㈩㈡そして .” He stated this in deep masculine indigenous accent. Once more, we were being seduced by the influential alcohol and began to conversed and contemplate.
The ever vigilant war that raged in my mind… slowly my emotions over taken me and I gazed upon his tanned face. My mind now manifested many fancies from his medium lips, scuffle-like beard protruding from a nearly fine cut face, delightful pretty